ABigHeartforLife

　　 I will never forget that moment when I was pressing the buttons on the phone .I was entering a hot line to find out my results in the final examination of junior school. I remember having a hopeful but anxious feeling in my stomach. Kill or cure? The big moment had come. On hearing the voice say ＂Congratulations! You come top in the exam.＂ I cheered up.”You make it!＂ I just smiled a big smile to myself. The success really encouraged me a lot.                   There is no doubt that for the youth the Internet is an important tool for study. Nothing can be compared with its convenient operation, high speed and varied information resources. As long as you click what you need, you’ll get a large number of information picked out in such a short time. Besides outputting the information, at the same time, yon can input your own works and send them to the Internet. In this way you can have more opportunities to share the tremendous spiritual excitement with the ones who have common goals. By comparison, the youth prefer to spend the long and friendless evenings in front of the computer—it seers to be the only form of entertainment. They have a variety of experiences: from the chat to the love online,from the network game to the network crime. Perhaps they have led the cultural trend of the network, and they are the spreader of the Internet culture.                                The old, however, sometimes imagine .the Internet to be a sort of place full of mystery. They often failed to understand how the ‘net’ works. One thing is certain, however, they always go into raptures at the mere mention the Internet. They are forever talking with a proud about how skilled their grandsons operate the computer and surf the Internet, or the fantastic the Internet trip they went on their own ----after that, they never forget to list the privilege of modern science one by one, and make a conclusion that how fast the science and technology developed.   No one can avoid being influence.
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　　I will never forget that moment when I was pressing the buttons on the phone .I was entering a hot line to find out my results in the final examination of junior school. I remember having a hopeful but anxious feeling in my stomach. Kill or cure? The big moment had come. On hearing the voice say ＂Congratulations! You come top in the exam.＂ I cheered up.”You  made  it!＂ I just smiled a big smile to myself. The success really encouraged me a lot.
　　There is no doubt that for the youth the Internet is an important tool for study. Nothing can be compared with its convenient operation, high speed and varied information resources. As long as you click what you need, you’ll get a  great deal of  information picked out in such a short time. Besides outputting the information, at the same time,  you  can input your own works and send them to the Internet. In this way you can have more opportunities to share the tremendous spiritual excitement with the ones who have common goals. By comparison, the youth prefer to spend the long and friendless evenings in front of the computer—it  seems  to be the only form of entertainment. They have a variety of experiences: from the chat to the love online, from the network game to the network crime. Perhaps they have led the cultural trend of the network, and they are the spreader of the Internet culture.                                 The old, however, sometimes  imagine the Internet  to be a sort of place full of mystery. They often failed to understand how the ‘net’ works. One thing is certain, however, they always go into raptures at the mere mention the Internet. They are forever talking with a proud about how skilled their grandsons  operating  the computer and surf the Internet, or the fantastic the Internet trip they went on their own ----after that, they never forget to list the privilege of modern science one by one, and make a conclusion that how fast the science and technology developed.   No one can avoid being influenced.
　　六年级:陈煊琪