TheBoomingofSpring，TheBoomingo

　　TheBoomingofSpring
　　Springarrivesattheschoolinsuchahurrythatitisbeyondanyonesexpectation。Aftersomerathercooldays，thetemperaturesuddenlyrisesup，bringingasuddenburstofheattothewholecampus。Springiscoming！
　　Trees，flowers，grassandpeoplemakeupthewholesceneonthecampus。Everyonewakesupandeverythingisrobust。Thewholecampusisheapedwithenergy。
　　Seeingthroughathinlayerofwatervapor，Iamsurprisedatwhatisgraduallyunfoldedbeforemyeyes。Look，thepeartreesarecoveredwithsnowwhiteflowers。Someotherunknownflowers，pinkandscarlet，givelifetothebrownbranchesoftrees。Thegrassplotsseemtohaveturnedintoemeraldgreenovernight。Holdingthetinydropsofwaterintherainandrisinghappilytowardsthepasserby，thegrassisshowingarathervividfeelingofspring。Theboomingtreesalongtheroadaretryingtoshakeawayoldleavesandexpectingnewones。Steppingonthefallenleaves，Iamfascinatedbytherhythmandthemysteryoflifecycle。
　　Peopleinspringareasactiveasthesurroundings。Thecontinualraincannotstopstudentsfromstudyinghard。Instead，itquickenstheirpaceoflife。Thesoundofraindropsoverwhelmsthechattingofstudents。Colorfulumbrellassetartificialseparationsofpeople。Anatmosphereofstudyembracestheschool。Theearlysunisanindustriousreveille，urgingpeopletobeactireanddiligent。Studentsinspringarejustlikeearlybirdssearchingforworms。Librariesandclassroomsarebothniceplacesforstudy。TherearecrowdsreadingquietlyinthelibrariesandpeoplepracticingEnglishaloudinthecornersofbuildings。Astonishedbysomanyhardworkingpeople，Ifeelashamedofwastingtimewanderingabout。
　　Springisaseasonofenergyandhope。Theboomingspringonthecampuscomestoshowusanewleafoflife。
　　简评
　　本文描写了春天来临时，校园中一派生机勃勃的景象。文章的前半部分写景：有色彩斑斓的花朵，墨绿色的草地和茁壮生长的树木；后半部分写人：与自然界中的万物在春天生命力格外旺盛一样，莘莘学子也比其他任何时候都刻苦勤奋，整个校园中都呈现出浓浓的学习氛围。最后一段，作者总结全文：春天是精力旺盛和充满希望的季节。
　　本文存在以下不足之处：第四段中，作者的主旨是描写人，但又不时地提到环境，如ThesoundofraindropsoverwhelmsthechattingofstudentsColorfulumbrellassetartificialsevaratlonsofpeople等，与主题句Peoplelnspringareasactiveasthesurroundings无关，破坏了整个段落的统一性（unity）。在英语写作中，一个段落表达一个主题，所有的支持句（supportingsentences）都要围绕主题句展开。此外，最后一句anewleafoflife明显是中式英语，可改为ushersustoanewstageoflife。
　　（点评教师：黄莺）
　　TheBoomingofSpring